User talk:Randiraefair/Personal Sandbox

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I like how you laid out the outline of your article before getting into the actual article, just add the main heading. The intro of the whole event probably could be a little longer instead of a brief couple of sentences so the readers has a good idea of the importance of the event before reading the sub topics. Good categories just add a little more detail. Hist fall2011 (talk) 20:47, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I enjoyed your article. It was interesting and had a lot enough detail. I also agree that the intro could be a little longer. I know for many readers the intro paragraph is where they get most of the information on a page Shoff75 (talk) 18:51, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

First of all, you have to work on categories at first which is not correctly typed online. The headings and writings at the very first paragraphs should be fixed properly as Dr. Sullivan informed us last previous weeks. Since headings of other last paragraphs seem like all big and bolded, it is confusing to recognize which topic you actually worked on. However, the information of each section is well written with pack of specific details. I like how the South Carolina’s slave history covers the era of 1500’s and until 1800’s. It is great that various point of view including Great Britain and all the states on the slavery issues. But since there is no proper title in this webpage, it is still obscure that which is the main topic and how other paragraphs are related to the main theme. You have to fix the title and explain how other four contents relates to the main event. — Preceding unsigned comment added by See Kim (talk • contribs) 20:55, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]