User talk:RMH TRAVELER/sandbox
Good start to the article, I like how you outlined the design of the mall to give us readers a visual picture of what the mall looks like. One thing to do is to try and find at least one or two citations per paragraph. Other than that, you have a very good start in outlining what the mall is and what it consists of.
the structure is good
topic seems neutral
compared to the original you've added way more things and added more significant things
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