User talk:Qkyang
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Anh's comment
[edit]Your article seems to be very well-organized and balanced. The introduction is concise, to-the-point, interesting, and well-written. I'm curious about the water supply system's influence - how many people does it affect? what role does it play for individuals, families, or society? And what effect would the ongoing/ upcoming repairs might bring? Also, the History part could be expanded too. Goodluck!
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:33, 23 October 2019 (UTC)
Jackie's Peer Review
[edit]Your article seems really great. The language keeps a neutral tone throughout the entire article. The intro is the only place where I feel the language is favoring the New York water supply system more than others and it looses its neutral tone for a little bit. The article is missing an entire section about the history of the supply system and I think adding to it would be very beneficial to understand how it all came to be. Some of the sections throughout the article are a lot shorter than others. For example, I would try to look into expanding upon the NYC Water Board section, as well as the distribution system section. Lastly, the last section about upgrades reads a little choppy. Smoothing it out could help improve the flow of the article. Overall, I think this is a very informational article and your group has done a good job in editing so far. Also, maybe some pictures will help bring it to life a little bit!Jackie Kerth (talk) 07:17, 19 November 2019 (UTC)