User talk:Pkotrike
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[edit]Hello, Pkotrike, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:32, 27 August 2016 (UTC)
Message from Ramya
[edit]Hi Prem, it’s great to have you in our team, appreciate your contributions in our discussions. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ramya Priya (talk • contribs) 21:34, 6 September 2016 (UTC)
Hello!
[edit]Hello prem, nice to meet you and I am happy to share my Emerging Technologies class with you and all of our classmates. Let us all hope for the best to happen in this semester. I wish you a Good luck prem.Stadepell (talk) 13:03, 11 September 2016 (UTC)
Hello Prem
[edit]It is really nice meeting you in this class I hope that we have some fun and learn some interesting concepts in emerging technologies. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pola sumanth (talk • contribs) 01:36, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
Hello Prem...
[edit]I am just trying to use Talk page with some edits. Looking forward to have a great semester with you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lathivik (talk • contribs) 15:14, 19 September 2016 (UTC)
Article selection
[edit]I think either one are good candidates for improvement. Collaborative decision-making software seems a bit more of a mess, which probably means that would improvements would have a bigger impact. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:16, 21 September 2016 (UTC)
Reference links
[edit]Hi Prem. I noticed you added several links to journal articles in your sandbox that are routed through your university's proxy server - one, for example, has a url that includes pubsonline.informs.org.ezproxy.ltu.edu while another includes sciencedirect.com.ezproxy.ltu.edu. I just wanted to let you know that while these links are accessible to you, they won't be accessible to anyone who isn't logged into your university's website. When you get around to actually drafting your contributions, I would recommend using the DOI for the article, and plugging it into the Cite tool. Thanks. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:48, 5 October 2016 (UTC)
Class Assignment
[edit]Hi Prem Sagar You have made a good draft. Since you are focusing on benefits and potential , some suggestions you could consider , if time permits is to add some applications of CDM technology in disaster managment [1], CDM in air traffic like this article talks about [2].This article is pretty old but you could find new research in this area. Other application would be to talk aboute CDM in watershed manangement [3] You could also talk about benefits of CDM in healthcare systems. The reason i am stressing on applications is that i checked if there is a separate article for CDM ,since you are doing your project on CDM software ,there was group decision making article,but it doesn't talk about applications. So you could write about how the software can help or what CDM softwares can help in these applications . In the first sentence I feel that you don't have to distinguish between CDM and CDM Software, you could just write it as separate sentences. That's it . All the best . Thank you Aishwarya889 (talk) 19:22, 14 October 2016 (UTC)
Freeware
[edit]The first thing that jumps out at me about your proposed text is that it is written as if it's talking to someone - you could easily insert the word "you" into the text and it would still work. Encyclopedia articles aren't supposed to be written like that - they are supposed to describe what other sources say. They should never feel like the writer is speaking to the reader. In addition, Wikipedia articles aren't supposed to include "how to" information. Finally, if you find yourself using an exclamation mark in an encyclopedia article, odds are you are on the wrong track when it comes to tone. Encyclopedia writing isn't supposed to exclaim things. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:29, 17 October 2016 (UTC)
- I got your request for feedback, but you haven't yet implemented the last set of feedback I gave you. I need you to address them before I can give you further feedback. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:17, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
- You need to do some serious copyediting. It's "Freeware" not "The freeware" unless you're discussing a specific item of freeware. You shouldn't start a sentence with the word "but". You have a comma with no space after. This is basic stuff that you really need to fix before asking for feedback. Apart from that, your reference isn't a proper reference. Use the Cite tool and fill out a proper citation. Assuming this is a book, it needs a proper title, a year of publication, preferably an ISBN. The citation you added isn't useable - a Google search of "Freeware, Susan Hamburger,OCLC No.:5295680214" doesn't provide me with a single hit. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:52, 25 October 2016 (UTC)