User talk:Pflanzenliebhaber749/sandbox
I plan on working on the "Turgor pressure" wikipedia page. There isn't much information on/examples of how the turgor pressure is expressed in the plant's physiology.
Bibliography for this section can include scientific articles that show the correlation of how bacteria can regulate turgor pressure to optimize their growth [1] and things like how surface tension and turgor pressure are generated in mitotic cells [2]. There are in depth analyzations of how osmolytes affect turgor pressure in plants[3]. I'll analyze these and do more research into these paper's topics and write about these in the article.
Peer Review
[edit]You did really well with choosing images to describe what you are talking about. With a topic that needs imagery and diagrams to better explain itself like turgor pressure, I am glad that you added those early. You were able to say a lot about what was wrong with the article and how to advance towards the goal, and you found what seems like a lot of good sources that are providing a lot of the information. The section on mechanisms is a good place for readers without a depth of knowledge to start. I recognize that You do not have citations for this article, but this might allow you to more efficiently associate the ideas you have to the papers that you have collected.
Turgor Pressure in Plants Section dispersal did not make much sense to me as an outside reader. Scientific names are italicized and the lack of formatting occurred all the way through the project. Flowering and reproductive organs/seed dispersal might do better as a single category with a simpler name. The section on growth seemed too focused on drawing readers' attention, the use of the exclamation point and what I considered an unnecessary point about the growth of trees imply this. It's good that you are providing examples for readers, but some of these examples should remain on their respective pages. The section on turgidity was difficult to understand, and the second sentence does not seem to be written correctly. The mimosa is a well known example and you did a good job of explaining it, but this information might be better used on the mimosa page than the turgor pressure page.
Function in Other Taxa The section on protists only explains what protists without cell walls use to regulate water quantity but does not relate this back to turgor pressure. Animals were already explained as not having turgor pressure earlier in the article and should not need their own section header.
Measurements What does "sixes" mean in the lead? The history of the pressure probe was difficult to follow concerning the change in the use of the technology.
Theoretical Speculations The section seems biased towards the work of M T Tyree. How many sources did you find on this topic? When I read the section I felt that I could confidently come away with a position handed to me by the writer. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Randalj16 (talk • contribs) 06:41, 24 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer review response
[edit]I understand that my draft doesn't include my citations or notes regarding what else I need to add, re-write or be more specific on- these are all another word document and I didn't want to upload more things here. I will change the exclamation points that I added back to periods now that I see your perspective on that. I also know i need to add more information so that I am not biased on the M Y tyree paper, but it was a bit difficult to find more theoretical papers on that. I also need to find more information about the history of turgor pressure, but that is proving to be difficult as well. I know i will need to re-word some of my sections to make them easy to understand, and I will also take the time to correctly link some other pages (ex, mimosa, atomic-force microscope) but I at least wanted to include a little information about the linked page so that the reader can get most of the information needed from this one page. I will cut some things out after I do that though. Thank you for your feedback and I hope my article isn't too shabby after I fix it, keeping in mind your suggestions. Pflanzenliebhaber749 (talk) 03:57, 26 March 2017 (UTC)