User talk:Pax91/sandbox
Hi Pax91, my name is Neda and I'm also in HMB436. I read that your fungus is relatively new, which is surprising because there is already so much information about it! Your page looks good so far, but I have a couple of suggestions. I think that some points need to be moved into different sections, for instance the Etymology section was an awesome idea to make, however some points from your initial section on the fungus should belong there:
- "Relatively new fungus, discovered only in 2009." -- Don't be afraid to go into detail about how it was discovered! (I definitely did haha)
- "Because it is relatively new, it is considered to be cryptic in nature."
- "Originally identified to be part of the species Aspergillus terreus"
- "Discovered to be part of a seperate clade after genetic testing and phylogenetic analysis"
In all, you can either separate the two sections or you can combine them as one under the name of the species. Unless you find substantial evidence on how it was first identified, where it was first identified, and why it was recorded as a significant occasion, it is better to keep the two headings combined. Speaking of which, the heading of the species name is not under the proper template (i.e. it is not larger and underlined like a heading section would be). I would refer to Professor Scott's Wiki page to update that. Whilst doing so, I would add in a Taxobox to your page. The template is also provided here: Wikipedia:Wiki_Ed/University_of_Toronto/HMB436H_Medical_and_Veterinary_Mycology_(Fall_2015)/overview
To help me fill my Taxobox, I used MycoBank. When you search for your fungus, it will give your fungus its classification and associated taxa - everything you need to fill the box. Trust me, it's extremely helpful when there is not a lot of information available for your fungus.
As well, in the "Health Concerns" heading, if your fungus predominantly causes one disease (Aspergillosis), I think it may be easier just to rename that section to the disease name, so when you are talking in detail about it there is no confusion. Moreover, you can add the drugs it reacts to in this section (antifungal drug amphotericin B, voriconazole, etc) instead of the Habitat and Ecology section.
Generally, I think your page has a lot of potential to go into detail about your fungus, and you have a lot of information available and already in your page! Cleaning up the organization and maybe going into more detail with more articles on its physiology, pathogenicity and contribution to disease may help in making your page more full.
Good luck on the rest of this assignment and the rest of this course! If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message.
Neda
Hi Pax91,
My name is Alessia and I am another student from your HMB436 class. I definitely agree with the suggestions that Neda made above. If you would like to add to your Etymology section, may I suggest viewing this article in pubmed: http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3291468/, which discusses the etymology of the genus Aspergillus. The priest Pier Antonio Micheli named the genus because of its resemblance to the aspergillum, used to scatter holy water during a mass service. The word originated from the latin aspergere, meaning "to scatter" .
Aditionally, it would be helpful to future readers of this article if you link to other Wikipedia pages for terms that the general public might find unfamiliar. You may want to link to the pages for conidium (for the words conidial and/or conidiophores), phialides, voriconazole, itraconazole, and echinocandins. Also you might want to define words such as metulae and subglobulose that do not yet have Wikipedia pages.
To help with organization, perhaps move the information about which sugars it can utilize under your Physiology heading, or combine the Growth and Morphology heading with the Physiology heading into one comprehensive category. You could also look to articles on Aspergillus terreus for more information about physiology. Since it was classified as A. terreus until recently, a lot of the information about A. alabamensis could be found within articles about A. terreus.
Other than those suggestions, along with some cleaning up and restructuring, your article is off to a great start!