User talk:Paperclip777

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Yes, you did it just right. :) Feel free to ask me any questions if you need help, or do it just like I described above. Cheers, Steven Walling 03:33, 23 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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To improve the article's notability, I have now removed three citations from self-published sources. Nine citations from published sources remain. They are as follows (listed in alphbetical order):

Automation and Control - Design News
Bodyshop Magazine
CEDMagazine
Control Engineering
e-security Planet
Energy Manufacturing
Forrester Reseearch
Just for Canadian Doctors
Winnipeg Free Press

Other changes made in this edit include:

I edited the paragraph that begins "In 2006 . . " under the heading "Company history". I removed the second sentence that specifically mentions product names, as well as the last sentence.
I changed the word 'feature' to 'include' in the paragraph that begins "Mobile collaboration . . " under the heading "Mobile collaboration"
I added a wikilink to Videoconferencing

I will continue to re-work this article: I will focus on the introductory paragraph in the Lead section to help explain why Librestream is notable.

Thank you. From User:PaperClip:777 May 23, 2011 (3:25 pm CDT) ______________________________________________

To continue to improve the article's notability, I added a second paragraph in the Lead section to explain why Librestream's technology is notable. I reviewed and compared four articles from related companies in this regard (Audiosoft,Lifesize, Radvision, and Vidyo).

I also added four categories to this article: Collaboration, Mobile technology, Teleconferencing, and Videotelephony.

I have a question regarding External links. I noticed on the article on Mobile collaboration that the External links had been removed. Is it acceptable to include External links on this Librestream article? If not, I will remove them.

Thank you. Paperclip777 (talk) 21:37, 23 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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To continue to improve the article's tone, I changed the second sentence in the Lead section from "...innovative solutions enabling..." to "...technologies that enable...". Paperclip777 (talk) 19:28, 24 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]