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Your submission at Articles for creation: PACTO Helmets (November 12)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by MarcGarver were:

The content of this submission includes material that does not meet Wikipedia's minimum standard for inline citations. Please cite your sources using footnotes. For instructions on how to do this, please see Referencing for beginners. Thank you.

This submission appears to read more like an advertisement than an entry in an encyclopedia. Encyclopedia articles need to be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources, not just to materials produced by the creator of the subject being discussed. This is important so that the article can meet Wikipedia's verifiability policy and the notability of the subject can be established. If you still feel that this subject is worthy of inclusion in Wikipedia, please rewrite your submission to comply with these policies.

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MarcGarver (talk) 19:32, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Pabloaquesada! Having an article draft declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! MarcGarver (talk) 19:32, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Marc, Thanks for your message, I wanted to create this article about a subject I admire and I'm passionate about, vintage motor racing, as found out that PACTO helmets created the original helmets for all the drivers in the period correct movie about Ferrari, and maybe you with your expertise could help me edit appropriately the content to meet Wikipedia's standards. Pabloaquesada (talk) 20:38, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

There is probably a notable article to write, but your starting point reads very much like a celebratory piece written for a motor magazine, not an encyclopaedic article. I think your best starting point is to read a couple of articles about a similar thing and use them as a template for the structure and the language in your draft. For example, the history section of Triumph Motorcycles Ltd lays out a very "dry" factual account of the history whereas your draft uses words like "passion", "dedication", "respected", "piece of art". These are not neutral terms and none are cited to a reliable source, so it makes your draft read like an advert. MarcGarver (talk) 08:10, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]