User talk:Nor'bro 123/sandbox
Peer Review ENGW3307
[edit]Hi,
This is an awesome topic, good choice.
I would check for small errors like capitalization (sometimes ‘puberty blockers’ is written as ‘Puberty Blockers’) and stray punctuation marks (see both the title and end of Medications section)
There is a good level of vocabulary and writing style that makes the article readable for general audiences.
In the Effects section, could an explanation be added for the mechanism by which puberty blockers work? As it is, this section feels a little short.
Under Controversy, are there any more sources you could add that evaluate the benefits/effects of puberty blockers for trans youth? Additional evidence would support the information you have in the previous section.
The references and external links sections need a little cleaning up before being moved to the main space, some formatting appears to be off.
Best, Clearglasses (talk) 23:58, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer review for ENGW3307
[edit]Review: 4/15/17 by Rmills66
This is a very interesting topic and a great article to improve in wikipedia. I enjoyed learning about this controversial treatment!
My first suggestion is to re work the table of contents and the structure of the article a little bit. The sections of "Medications" and "Effects" are very broad and relatively imprecise. I would rename these sections to give more information about what is covered in these sections. Overall, the order of these sections is good, but you may want to add another section for Medical Uses in the beginning. Most wikipedia articles on medicine have this section, and it explains the application of the treatment. You explain the application of puberty blockers in the introduction and in the "Transgender Community" section, but you may want to go more in depth on this subject in a "Medical Uses" section.
Your writing is well-suited for wikipedia; it is fact based and neutral. However, try to avoid any bias in the controversy section. You also need to add more citations within the article. The whole "Medications" section does not have a single citation. Additionally, you should format your citations in the "References" section according to wikipedia standards.
Overall, this is a good start! Your article would benefit from more research, especially research related to the controversy behind this treatment. I think your lead section is good so far, but you could add more information as you do more research. Also including some pictures of people who need this treatment would improve the article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rmills66 (talk • contribs) 20:13, 15 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Very interesting topic!! with my crazy obsession with learning about gender and everything around it, I found this to be super interesting to read. I would suggest as the others said, for you to create a chart to better explain some things such as medication and effects.. It doesn't need to be a huge detailed chart, but just enough to help readers see what you are talking about. Also, I suggest you add more sources to support your. Argument that this is used for the transgender community. As you stated, this is very controversial, and many people will be upset mainly because you are pointing out one community around one subject. If you are going to name the transgender community as being the ones who use puberty blockers the most, then you need to have multiple resources to support that argument for your own sake ! Also I found a website that you can hyperlink "testotoxicosis" to ....https://rarediseases.info.nih.gov/diseases/4475/testotoxicosis
Other than that, great job, great topic ! Just be careful with grammar and punctuation. :) Spongebubble94 (talk) 20:37, 17 April 2017 (UTC)