User talk:Njoyner/sandbox
World Drug Report Peer Review 1
[edit] Overall, the information you have added to the article does a good job of explaining what the World Drug Report is and what its purpose is. The article is definitely significantly improved after the edits, as previously it did not explain the purpose of the World Drug Report. I think it would be beneficial if you added a link to the introduction that can connect people to a site where they can read the actual report, if said site exists. You should also add links to the Wikipedia pages to the names of people and directors of the UNODC that you mentioned.
I feel that the title of the second paragraph, "United Nations Office on Drugs and Crime Leadership," is misleading. The paragraph really only discusses Mr. Fedotov. You should either change the title so that it reflects this, or add more information on other members of the office and their duties. I think the second option is better, if you can find that information, as it will allow the reader to get a better idea of the people behind the report.
I also feel that you should add some figures to make the article a little more appealing. Pictures of the office and maybe members of the UNODC could make the article more visually appealing. You could also add a list of member states of the UNODC, which could help add more beneficial information to the article.
Overall the edits make the article much more informative to a reader who does not know what the World Drug Report is and is looking to gain brief insight into what it is and how it's written. The style follows Wikipedia guidelines and your references are good.
Ajwish (talk) 18:08, 25 March 2016 (UTC)ajwish
Response to Peer Review
[edit]Thank you for reading and thoughtfully reviewing our improved Wikipedia page. In the published Wikipedia page on the World Drug Report, a link to the website where readers can view the actual report is in the external links section at the bottom. If that did not already have this element, we would have taken your advice and added such link somewhere in our draft. We followed your advice and added hyperlinks to the pages that were mentioned in our article. We also changed the title of the second section to clarify the fact that we are only giving information about the UNODC's executive director. We also followed your advice and added three figures. Because of copyright issues, we were not able to include pictures of the office, so we made tables that included report data. Njoyner (talk)
World Drug Report Peer Review 2
[edit] The information you have added to the World Drug Report article has definitely made the article a much better resource for people looking for a quick overview of what the World Drug Report is. The initial article lacked any information about the report outside of the criticisms offered by the one resource originally cited. The introduction section before the body of the article is a little bare and you may want to consider adding a little more information to this area, possibly including some of the information that you added to the history section to give a reader a better idea of what the report is at a quick glance. There is likely a lot of links that you could add to other articles on Wikipedia since most parts of the United Nations is noteworthy enough to have a page of their own but this a quick fix that can be done later in the article development.
The figures and references that you used appear to be of high quality as they all come from the United Nations which can be assumed to be a reputable source. You may want to consider looking for some resources outside the United Nations though as the original article was exclusively about possible problems with the data presented in the report and a resource that corroborates these UN findings would make the article that much stronger of a piece.
Overall it seems that you plan to make much needed additions to this short article that will allow the causal researcher to be more knowledgeable about the World Drug report. It seems a lot of the information you have provided to this Wiki all comes in the body, but taking a moment to add some information and links to the introduction paragraph would really make this article more approachable and informative to a person just browsing this page out of interest.
Response to Peer Review
[edit]Thank you for the article response! Although our introduction section is short, we really feel that it efficiently introduces the World Drug Report to the reader and that we go into enough detail in the subsequent sections of the article. We took your advice to add hyperlinks to other articles on Wikipedia. Although we did not incorporate figures in our original draft, we have now added data from the report into table format. We have also done additional research and found information from other sources so that not all of our information comes from the UNODC. - Kiva McGhee
instructor comments
[edit]1) Content
A) Is the introductory section accessible for non-experts?
Yes.
B) Do the contents of each section justify its length?
Yes.
C) Are all the important terms/concepts linked to their respective Wikipedia pages for further references?
No. Such links are missing. For example, there is a page on United Nations Office on Drugs and Crime.
D) Are the highlighted examples appropriate?
Yes.
E) Is the content duplicative of any other content already on Wikipedia?
No
2) Figures
A) Are the figures original and of high quality?
No figures are provided.
B) Are the figures informative and add to the text?
N/A
C) Are the substance and/or protein structures chemically accurate, aligned, and easy to read? N/A
3) References
A) Are the references complete?
Yes. However, it would be nice to get references from non UNODC source.
B) Are the references inclusive of non-journal sources?
Yes
4) Overall Presentation
The group did produce three paragraphs on the proposed topic. The points were deducted for not including Figures and links. At the same time, this work is well written and does improve the existing article.
Suggestions from ChemLibrarian
[edit]Good job in expanding the article. A few suggestions here before you post it to the main space.
- Make sure your references are formatted better. Some of these references are Reports from government and some are web pages. You should at least have the title of the report and may be the agencies published listed as the author. More importantly, you need to list your Access Date with the URL. Please re-do the references to include them. Also, when you post, please do not delete the references originally cited with the existing paragraph. When you copied that paragraph into your sandbox, you did not copy it from the Edit Sources box and that's why the format didn't transfer.
- I would suggest you put the History section as a part of the Lead section. But both way works for now.
- For the added tables, I'd suggest you make a plot with three curves to show the index change, that would help you meet the figure requirements. And remember to add the data source citation to the caption of your figure. See this video and this tutorial Wikipedia:Picture tutorial for more tips on how to upload, position and size your plot.