User talk:Nighbemn/sandbox
Savanah's Peer Review
[edit]When describing Steve Irwin, I would refrain from referring to him as a "popular" zoologist and celebrity. This is subjective language (even though he is really popular), perhaps use a different word or get rid of it altogether. Savanahhlee (talk) 16:48, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- I would also recommend adding links to related Wikipedia articles, such as to "Cloaca" and maybe even to "Steve Irwin." This can be done by highlighting the word/phrase and using the "link" button to find these and insert Wikilinks. Savanahhlee (talk) 16:53, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- The lead section has not been expanded at all, but a significant contribution has been made to the respiration section and it makes the concept much more clear to the reader. A Wikilink would further strengthen this, so people can look up concepts that may still be difficult to understand. Savanahhlee (talk) 16:55, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- The title and section titles are succinct, but confusing as to what the content covers. Under the "living" section, I would keep the title of "respiration" but your contribution otherwise is good. Savanahhlee (talk) 17:05, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- I would suggest trying to find a different picture of the turtle, because the photo available is very dark and you cannot see it at all. This might be challenging, but there is likely some free-use image that would be better to display the animal. Savanahhlee (talk) 17:05, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- The title and section titles are succinct, but confusing as to what the content covers. Under the "living" section, I would keep the title of "respiration" but your contribution otherwise is good. Savanahhlee (talk) 17:05, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
- The lead section has not been expanded at all, but a significant contribution has been made to the respiration section and it makes the concept much more clear to the reader. A Wikilink would further strengthen this, so people can look up concepts that may still be difficult to understand. Savanahhlee (talk) 16:55, 11 March 2019 (UTC)