User talk:NickFriedlich/sandbox
Evaluation made on "Ogaden War" article: There seems to be a need for greater discussion had in the "Effects of the War" section on the role that the withdrawal of Soviet Union's aid from Somalia had on Siad Barre's governing legitimacy. Beyond the fact that allegiance was transferred to Ethiopia, there is no mention of the fact that the unifying project of Barre's scientific socialism was irreparably damaged by the rescinding of Soviet support -- a move exacerbated by the disaffection within the top échelon of military ranks NickFriedlich (talk) 05:35, 6 March 2019 (UTC) NickFriedlich (talk) 05:38, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
Luckey Griffin Peer Review
[edit]Nicolas, just as a heads up, I had a little trouble distinguishing what you wrote and what was previously written, the organization on the “View History” page is a little confusing. I used the feature to read between revisions and I think I could see most of your edits.
Overall, I found your edits to be excellent. You added important information that was missing from the article which brought much more substance to the article.
A sense of neutrality is present throughout the article. The different actors covered in the article seem to be portrayed in a balanced manner. In a few places, there is some small, unnecessary opinions, likely of scholars, that maybe don’t need to be included in describing events.
The “Background to Formation” section provides an adequate amount of background in understanding the formation of the Quartet. It could perhaps be improved by providing context regarding religious politics in Tunisia.
In the “Activities and Processes” section, there could maybe be more explanation of the actions of the Quartet itself. It seems that the UGTT was more involved in organizing than any of the other three organizations. I understand that the UGTT led the coalition, but the article would benefit from recounting the actions of the Quartet as a whole.
“International Response and Aid” specifically describes response to the transition in Tunisia. This section could be improved by possibly adding responses that directly addressed the Quartet, rather than the general transition process.
The “Critiques” section could be improved by describing how exactly the National Dialogue opened the country up to more foreign investment, donor aid, and involvement from the IMF and World Bank. Maybe clarifying that it was policies that came from discussion at this dialogue, or that it was the leaders that came from the Quartet/ Dialogue it who encouraged more foreign investment.
The citations provided seem to all be from reputable sources, and diverse sources. Perhaps including a small bit of material directly from any of the Quartet organizations could offer a little more insight.
The edits and additions to this article were good and really added depth to this topic. I’m looking forward to viewing the rest of your contributions!