User talk:Neiceylyn

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Peer Review

I think the lead is solid. I like that it highlights the increase in maternal mortality deaths in the US recently, and shows how much different we are than the rest of the developed world. I think that is likely the most pertinent piece of information for people who would be searching for this. I think defining what maternal mortality is, but I’m a little confused. There is one sentence that states “some sources will define material mortality as the death of a woman up to 42 days after her pregnancy has ended, instead of one year.” This sentence is not sourced and is at odds with the other definition. I just think some clarity is needed. I also like that you have listed the most common medical conditions responsible for maternal mortality, I think that is excellent knowledge. However, I saw that it was hyperlinked in your sandbox. Not sure if you could bold and hyperlink the terms, but I think if so it could be useful. The images are good, and I like the location. They give a quick visual representation of the information right when I was wanting one on my read through. In the “Disparities” section, I noticed that there was a lack of citations. There are some statistics in there that are unsupported, as well as some unsupported statements throughout the rest of the ‘Disparities’ section. All in all, I think it’s a good article with good information, just missing a little citation. I like the organization and think it reads well.

Bts200 (talk) 21:31, 10 December 2018 (UTC)