User talk:Ndjima

I'm just practicing. Is this how you sent me the initial message? -- Lookwhatimook (talk) 18:26, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Hi Ndjima, here are my thoughts about your edit to Telehealth:

You say medical abortion in the first paragraph and then medication abortion in the second paragraph. I would either stick to consistent terminology or make it explicit that these are synonymous terms
You added an external link to Gynuity Health Projects. External links should generally not be placed in the body of an article. You can have no link or add a redlink there (Gynuity Health Projects) to let other readers/editors know that the article doesn't exist but could be created.
You have a regional focus, but this article is supposed to have a worldwide scope. Are telehealth abortions done anywhere else in the world? See if you can make the coverage more balanced.
You are citing a primary source for biomedical content, which is a red flag. This study is not a secondary source (it was written by the people who themselves conducted the study. Thus, it cannot be used to say This model has been shown to be safe, effective, efficient, and satisfactory. If you want to say that telabortions are safe and effective, it is mandatory that you use a secondary source. Otherwise, this content has to be removed promptly.

Let me know if you have questions. Thanks, Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]