User talk:Nbarnes7
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 01:00, 27 January 2020 (UTC)
Language acquisition by deaf children
[edit]I've been looking at your changes to Language acquisition by deaf children, and there's a lot of good things there, but some areas that need work. I think you pretty much nailed the module on references and writing citations, so good for you on that one. On the other hand, some of the writing seems choppy, awkward, simplistic, or suffers from poor organization. For example, where you wrote:
Sign languages which are signed languages are much like spoken languages. They will appear naturally among deaf groups even if no formal sign language has been taught. They are very much the same as a spoken language. <ref>...
. . .It has been known for some time that natural sign languages are much like English and Spanish, they are true languages, <ref>.. children learn them in much the same way as a spoken language and they follow the same social expectations of language systems.<ref>... There are many different sign languages used around the world.
and that's just one edit out of several you made on that page, adding 10k of text. I don't have time to go through this sentence by sentence right now, but it just seems off and disorganized to me, although your referencing is excellent. Maybe Elysia can do something with this. Mathglot (talk) 01:06, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
- Mathglot, thanks for a ping. I've made some copyediting adjustments to the text--what do you think? Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:28, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
- Elysia, better than before, but a lot of the text I quoted above is still there and I find it confusing or nonsensical. See for example, section Signing and manual methods, which I still find confusing. Mathglot (talk) 03:27, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
- It's a good choice of an article to work on, because there are plenty of things that need attention, that don't necessarily involve adding new sections. For example, the first section in the article needs a different title; it's currently too much like the article title, and fails MOS:NOBACKREF. There are plenty of structural and stylistic things that could be improved, but I don't know what kind of tasks the professor has assigned their students, so not sure if that type of improvement would meet expectations or not. Mathglot (talk) 03:33, 4 April 2020 (UTC)