User talk:NatashaHolloway/sandbox

Kenzie Veal Peer Reviewing Natasha's Article

Natasha, your article included Wikipedia-type sentences and was very informative. Did you find anything else other than the Ebony article? The information is great, but Aimme Harrison might be able to give you more sources for information. I think more citations would make this article even more credible.

There is an extra space right before you wrote about Harriet Tubman. It is a small edit but I wanted to let you know, it's hard to catch. There is also a space where you write "African- American women". And lastly, add a space between the period and the start of your last sentence. Besides small grammatical issues, this was a great article! I found a lot of similarities in the topic I wrote about with yours. There are so many famous organizations and women in history that can be so left out.

Annabel on Natasha Holloway's Demita Frazier

I love that you added the picture and the piece about the Combahee River Collective! I'm sure you've already looked for it, but if you could find any information about her early life or influences, I think that could add a lot to the article. If not that, maybe add some about her current work as a professional mentor and elaborate on that work. Overall, great use of citations and grammar! There does need to be a space after "Currently" and before "Frazier" in the first paragraph. I would also be consistent with your hyphenation of "African American" if you choose to do that. Besides what Kenzie mentioned formatting wise, it looks great. Great job! A.hillstrom (talk) 11:46, 18 April 2018 (UTC)Annabel Hillstrom