User talk:Nancy salto
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[edit]Hello, Nancy salto, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:11, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi! I saw your note on my talk page about your draft. I have some notes for you:
- This needs more sourcing. You only have two sources, both of which are written by the same person. This doesn't show a good depth of coverage, so this needs more sourcing, preferably academic and scholarly sourcing. Keep in mind, the sourcing doesn't have to be in English - if she's been primarily covered in Spanish, then it's definitely fine to use Spanish language sources. They just have to be independent/secondary and reliable per the training module. My only other warning is that since there is another woman by the same name, you'll have to be careful about sourcing.
- Some of the draft is written as a response or persuasive essay about Gutierrez, so this needs editing for tone. I will do a sample re-write of the career and exhibitions section for you. Here are some of the things I'm concerned about with that section:
- You need to specify when she attended university, if possible, and what degree she went for.
- Avoid subjective language unless you're attributing something someone said. For example, saying that Gutierrez is prominent and recognized could be subjective to the reader, even if they're familiar with her. It's better to let her deeds do the talking, so to speak, unless you're taking it from the source, in which case it should be something along the lines of "According to...". Phrases like popular should generally not be used unless they're in an attributed direct quote.
- Keep a general timeline in mind - some of this jumps around a bit. It just needs to be organized in chronological order or separated into paragraphs (ie, one covers exhibitions, one covers artwork).
- The Sara Solaimani statement seems so very general and it really looks like she was making a blanket statement about the exhibition rather than on Gutierrez's art in specific. What you need here is a statement that is about the artist alone, as opposed to a general one. It's never a good idea to use a general statement for a specific person or artwork, as that kind of opens the quote up to misinterpretation by the reader. I did manage to find the source for Solaimani's review, which I've included in the article as a source. I can't access it to see what she specifically says about Gutierrez, so you'll have to review that yourself.
Overall you have a good start here and I've fixed some of the formatting. It just needs more sourcing and some fine tuning, is all. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:52, 28 February 2019 (UTC)
- Hi! For the citations, you need to place them after the claim it's backing up, that way it will show up properly. The little number boxes (they show up essentially like [1] and so on, but smaller) should be after the claim. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:11, 11 March 2019 (UTC)
Move from Sandbox to Mainspace
[edit]Hi Shalor,
Can I please get some help moving my sandbox to the mainspace?
Thank you, Nancy Salto
Reference format
[edit]Hi Shalor can I please get some assistance in my reference section . I’m not sure why it’s not formatting correctly ?
Thank you in advance, Nancy Salto Nancy salto (talk) 03:26, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
I have 'patrolled' the page as part of the review process. There are some passages which are not in English. These should be translated appropriately. Thank you. Eagleash (talk) 01:48, 15 March 2019 (UTC)