User talk:NK560/Asian Americans in California

Peer review[edit] This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info[edit] Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) User:NK560 Link to draft you're reviewing: User:NK560/Asian Americans in California Lead[edit] Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes, I would suggest adding a section to your lead that shows how you added people to the article. Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes, I feel like you might be able to clarify it more Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? yes Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? it gives an overall view so no i believe it is fine Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? it is not overly detailed Content[edit] Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes it is Is the content added up-to-date? Yes Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Nothing missing, keep adding people and maybe add section or 2 that talks about the people overall and grouping them Tone and Balance[edit] Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral? yes Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? no Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? not that i found Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? no Sources and References[edit] Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? yes, just cite them and you are good to go:) Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Just add them and you are good! Are the sources current? they could be updated in the resource section Check a few links. Do they work? resource #2 link doesn't work Organization[edit] Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes and yes, just add your section Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? not that i found Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, it is pretty well organized, just add some paragraphs and pictures and I think you should be ready to go! Images and Media[edit] Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? It needs more images Are images well-captioned? it has no images Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? there are none so yes, just be careful when adding photos that they are ok to use Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? n/a

Overall impressions[edit] Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes it has, Just keep working and I think you have already put in a ton of work so good job! What are the strengths of the content added? You added a really notable list of people and its very long and its wonderful How can the content added be improved? Just what you were saying with photos and maybe a section or two, photos are a really great way to update and make an article better so I would try to focus on that! Overall evaluation

hey this is Austin and I liked your article, here is the link to my peer review https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NK560/Asian_Americans_in_California/Ajtantico_Peer_Review Ajtantico (talk) 05:25, 3 February 2020 (UTC) Ajtantico (shawty)[reply]

Feedback on your article

@NK560: The work you've done on the article seems to be great. It's a little hard for me to see the specific differences that you've made since you've only really kept the parts that are updated/changes but I think I see what's going on. A few pieces of feedback:

Much of your new article is a long list. Where did you get this list? Is it just the category? It might be good to put in descriptions as they do on the article [[List of Asian Americans].
As you polish this and get it ready to move, I would focus on expanding the text, not just the list. Wikipedia often contains lists but it's hard for these to be complete and I think there's overlap between the list you are building and List of Asian Americans and I wonder if other Wikpiedians will think it's appropriate.
I notice you haven't added any references. We were really hoping you'd do this!

All that said, I don't see any problems with what you've added and changed. Once you're ready, I think you can go ahead and move your changes over to the life article. Good luck! —mako ๛ 21:57, 13 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@NK560: The article is well-presented. For my suggestions, I think it would be a good idea to reorganize the list which contains a large amount of names so it could be easier for the readers to browse through the content. Also, it would be great to add a bibliography page for the article. Nice work!--Alex.yuan011995 (talk) 08:33, 17 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]