User talk:Mswintosky
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Peer Review
[edit]Hi! This is faith. I did your peer review this week. I did notice that you did add one citation to the article but other than that, not much has been done. I saw your sandbox with the sources that I assume you will be adding to the article. I think that would be a great start and will be a great addition to the article. Other than that, I don't think you have much of a plan, but I think you are at a great start.
Your article has a very interesting topic. I think will add a lot to the article and will make the topic stronger. When there is more added I think the article will be great.
Five things I think that could be added are:
I think a section on ethics involving post-mortem photography can be added. I think it would add a different perspective when it comes to post-mortem photography and would be a personable section than just information about the background of post-mortem photography.
The sentence structure can be revised. Some of the sentences are confusing to read and I think they can be easier to read.
Photo descriptions can be stronger. I think the first thing the audience looks at is the pictures. I think if there was more written under the photos, they are more likely to read the article.
More cultures can be added to the culture section to be more diverse. I know they talk about three different cultures, but I think if you could add another one or two; the comparison between them all could be interesting.
Check for spelling errors. there are some minor spelling errors that can be easily fixed.
Great job working on this.
- Faith — Preceding unsigned comment added by Fejenn (talk • contribs) 01:12, 19 October 2020 (UTC)