User talk:Mr. Senfai

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jejeni6 feedback

great job on your article, it was a pleasure reading your article. a few points I would like to point out:

when I was reading about the non-metal containing FDH, I did not fully understand or picture how bipolar form of NAD+ increases the electrophilicity of NAD+. What kind of conformational change causes that increase in electrophilicity?
maybe a few figures may help? pictures worth a thousand words I guess. :)
The headings/sections are a little unorganized in my opinion.
nice job explaining the EPR and XAS data of your enzyme.
very good writing style. Good flow and choice of words.
you could probably focus more on the mechanistic explanations of your enzyme; maybe go into more details about each proposed mechanism? figures may be helpful in this case as well.
overall great article. Learned a lot!

Feedback

Hi Mr. Senfai. Nice work on your draft article. I had a few points on how you might improve things

One of the strengths of Wikipedia is that it is hypertext. You can always summarise something briefly and link to a more detailed description somewhere else (where it might be referenced from several articles. For example, your section on "Families of enzymes containing Mo and W" might be more appropriate in the DMSO reductase article, where you might create a section on the DSMO reductase family of enzymes, and link to that section from here.
We need to treat "future work" in a different way to how research articles treat it. We can't speculate about future work, not in Wikipedia's voice. At best, say "[named source] says that there may be application in [named application]" (or something like that).
Section headers shouldn't repeat the article title or a version thereof.

As I said, you've done some really nice work, and these are fairly minor issue. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:56, 19 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]