User talk:Mp2332
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[edit]Hello, Mp2332, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:30, 17 October 2017 (UTC)
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[edit]Overall your information is good and detailed in a non-biased form. When you are talking about Endemic rates, I would state the values right after and then describe why, that way someone wont have to do as much digging.
" In the 1980s and 1990 BSE spread in cattle at an epidemic rate, this occurred because the cattle was fed processed remains of other cattle. You can say that prions may be a way that nature tells us not to be cannibals. Then our consumption of these cattle created a outbreak of the human form CJD.[2] There was a dramatic decline in BSE when feeding bans (infectious parts of cattle in the animal feed) were in place. The total estimated number of cattle infected was approximately 750,000 between 1980 and 1996."
I would put the total number of of cattle infected right after you state the endemic rate, and then describe why.
There are a few sentences that could be worded a little differently to flow better. "In North America on May 20, 2003 there was the first BSE case confirmed"... to me this sounds a little weird when reading. — Preceding unsigned comment added by SonnyGreenbush (talk • contribs) 05:58, 20 November 2017 (UTC)