User talk:Morgandels

Response to WCI peer review

Thanks for leaving comments on my article draft! I get how the way my draft looks with the lead might be a bit confusing. The first few sentences in that subheading are just a reminder for me to move all the paragraphs following the first to other sections of the article. I removed the second half of that one sentence about the gender gap because I'm only trying to summarize the article in my lead. I was wondering if you could specify what you think is choppy with this section? Is it my wording itself that I should improve upon, or was it just that my draft was somewhat unorganized? Thanks again Emma Adriana (talk) 18:07, 3 October 2021 (UTC)