User talk:Monserod/new sandbox

I believe you should add a heading to your work to let the readers know what you are going to talk about. A simple heading will be fine. However, if you are just adding to information on Wikipedia, then never mind.

For the first paragraph, there are some grammar errors. Go back and try to re-read it out loud. The first sentence for example can use an "s" at the end of the word difference. Also, when you are describing the dress, you can make it into a list instead of a period between each description. That way it can flow better. Also, I think you should add a citation here since I am curious where you got the description from. The only part I was confused was the format of the last sentence. Kmela001 (talk) 18:57, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

For the second paragraph, same thing. There are some grammar errors, misuse of commas (there is one sentence that could be a colon instead of comma or did not need a comma at all), or there are certain words missing, like in the last sentence. Other than that, it is fine. You can go back and read it out loud.Kmela001 (talk) 23:34, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]