User talk:Mmora243/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

Hi Melissa. A nice start here, but I think you are already going in the wrong direction. A social panic is something that is very distinct and separate from a panic attack. You will want to look at the work on moral panics (there's lots on this) and then look more closely at the social panic literature. Robert Wuthnow has a book that could be useful: take a look at his CV for a book that he wrote about people's fears of terrorism, big changes, etc. But you will probably have to find 5 new sources to work with, I'm afraid. Have you spoken with Sarah Hammill yet? Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:22, 6 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Also: please make sure you provide the full citations for your pieces! With links and such. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Alfgarciamora (talk • contribs) 13:22, 6 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Week 6: Hi Melissa. I think that this was a great revision of the material and it gets you going in the right direction. But I was hoping for a lot more information on your page. Remember that the more work you do now, the less work you will have to do later on. But start adding content to your sandbox that details information that you've gotten from your sources, etc. Alfgarciamora (talk) 12:37, 12 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Professor I was wondering if you can take a look at my lead section. I want to know if that is good enough or to add more information. Thank you! @Alfgarciamora:

@Mmora243: You have done SUCH an excellent job, Melissa! Wowza! I think that you are basically done with your research. Now you just have to put it all on the page in an encyclopedic and structured manner. Your lead section is a bit too long - remember that it should only be a sentence or two. But that is fine. From here on out, just focus on finishing up your transfer of material from sandbox to mainspace and with editing the content so that it is well-structured and encyclopedic. I am so proud of your work, and you should be too! =) Alfgarciamora (talk) 19:59, 4 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Alfgarciamora: Thank you Professor! I wanted to know if you can provide an example of one of you students page from last year to see how a proper encyclopedic and structured manner is done.

Peer Review

Hi Melissa, you have put a lot of effort into your article. I don't see a lead section in your sandbox, will you be using the lead section that is in the published article as it is now, or will you be contributing any changes? I think that the two sections you have now are good to include in the article, especially the section regarding the media and the role it plays in creating and encouraging social panic. There is some discussion of media in the Causes section (first bullet point), but I think that would fit better in the actual Media section. Can you go into more example about how the media affected the way the public sees situations under the Grass Roots Model? Also, I noticed that you plan on talking about terrorist attacks, specifically 9/11. That section could possibly be renamed to Results or Effects, as you plan on talking about how we respond to those types of events. I also think that section would benefit from including examples from different countries. That could serve as a way to discuss how social panic spreads between societies, which is something the article by Victor Jeffrey focuses on.

Are you using all those sources to write your article, or are you currently only pulling information from a few sources? I don't think all of those sources really fit with the topic, for example source #7 which is about panic attacks and not social panic (as Professor Garcia mentioned). Fthen001 (talk) 19:46, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Famirka! I was planning on contributing to the lead section for my article and yes I thought source #7 would be helpful but turns out it wasn't. I forgot to take it off from my references, thanks for reminding me. @Fthen001: