User talk:Mgs6876/sandbox
Emily Kennedy's Peer Edit Comments
[edit]For the community practice session, maybe it would be beneficial to mention the existence of community organizers that have not had formal training (didn’t Cesar Chavez only have a 7th grade education?) and maybe discuss how a formal education in community organizing can have drawbacks.
For the community practice vs. micro practice section, I would consider mentioning mezzo practice or how some social workers think “clinical and community work ideally should be conjoint practices born of the same vision” as defined by Austin, Coombs, & Barr in the Community-Centered Clinical Practice: Is the Integration of Micro and Macro Social Work Practice Possible? article.
In the non-traditional section, did you mean diligence or delicacy?
Overall you both did a wonderful job! I thought the material was well thought out and easy for non-social workers to understand.
Cainnear Hogan's Peer Edit Comments
[edit]I think you two did an awesome job with this assignment, and you met all requirements. The voice used throughout the article is clear and informative. Furthermore, you used language that can be understood by people outside of social work.
My only suggestion for editing would be to reread through the first paragraph in the "non-traditional" section- there seemed to be repetition of the same word multiple times in a sentence, making it a little difficult to read. For example, you say "as a means to provide more resources to more individuals" you could instead say "provide additional resources to more individuals."
The original image you created is very informative. I like it as a chart, but it might stand out more if you used the data to create a 2-D horizontal bar graph. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cakingry (talk • contribs) 00:09, 11 March 2015 (UTC)