User talk:Mbutenho
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:13, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
You have an overdue training assignment.
[edit]Please complete the assigned training modules. --Athome38 (talk) 16:22, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
You have an overdue training assignment.
[edit]Please complete the assigned training modules. --Athome38 (talk) 14:50, 23 January 2019 (UTC)
Danube School Peer Review
[edit]- The first few sentences provides a good overview of what the topic is. I think it may be beneficial to separate out your lead section from the rest of the article so that people visiting can read a few short sentences to get an overview.
- As for structure, I think this article would benefit from sectioning off different elements in order to make it easier to navigate. The list of artists could be its own section titled "Notable Artists". I would also break the first paragraph to make a section about the characteristics of the paintings created (what's typical for the art of the Danube School?).
- For your citations, it's easier to navigate the sources on an article when using Wikipedia's footnote citation style. This also makes it easier for the reader to see which pieces of information are coming from where. It would be pretty easy to convert the bibliography section to this if you remember which pieces of information were pulled from where.
- Your writing is easy to read and covers the topic in a neutral way for the most part. The only sentence that could be rephrased to keep the neutral tone would be: "Of all the artists within the Danube School, Albrecht Altdorfer is one that has mastered the landscapes of the Danube." It's unclear whether you are the one asserting that Altdorfer mastered the landscape style (remember that you are not allowed to make your own assertions in Wikipedia articles) or if this assertion was pulled from a scholar. In the case that a scholar from one of your sources makes this claim, I would change the wording of this to "The [academic specialization] scholar, [Name of scholar], suggests that of the Danube School artists, Albrecht Altdorfer was the one who mastered the landscape genre."
- Because this article is about art, I would encourage you to find Wikimedia Commons images of some of the paintings that came from this school; I think something from Altdorfer would be helpful. At the end of the day, you can talk about the art in great detail, but nothing will back up the facts of the article more than actual examples of the artwork produced.
Hope this helps! Kmitchell2015 (talk) 04:17, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
- I went ahead and added in some section headings on your article to divide up the text a little more. The content within those sections can definitely be expanded upon. In the talk page of the article, I included some sources I found that look like they'd help round out the article. Most of the writing on this topic is in German or not accessible to me, or both. Hopefully someone who has better access to German texts will work on this article in the future. I also went ahead and included another image from Wikimedia Commons in the article to help support the idea mentioned in the lead paragraph that many of the artists were also printmakers.