User talk:Mayerhofere1/here is a new page
Hi Emily! Your article about Bailey Sok is looking really great! I especially like the 'social media' section you have included because not only is that relevant to the person, but it is relevant to the Gen Z audience as well. You also keep a neutral tone throughout which is good, and the organization is clear and easy to follow.
Here are a few suggestions: -I think you could add more links into the article as a whole. There are many references to shows and famous people, so it would be fairly simple to add Wiki links to "America's Got Talent" or "Jason Derulo," for example. It would also potentially increase your article quality. -I would also add a reference after the sent about "she told the press" because it is a direct mention of a particular article. -In general, I think a little more background about dance in general could be useful for this article. I danced for 15 years and know the scoring systems and technicalities, but most people wouldn't know. Some little explanations about what types of dance Sok does and why she's famous for it could help strengthen the article as a whole. -Social media section -- does she has 1.5 million between both Instagram and TikTok or that many followers per each platform? -Last sentence -- the formatting looks a little weird. I'd break it up into shorter, easier to read sentences. -Reference sections -- It looks like this got combined with an awards section? I would double check that and probably separate the two. -Images -- Are you planning to add any? I had a copyright issue with a photo I tried to add to my own article, so I'm not one to really comment on this. Just curious if you plan to add an image or not!
Let me know if you have any questions about my comments :) Good job! -Lauren
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