User talk:Matthewbarsalona/sandbox

Hi Mathew, A couple comments regarding your Lead Section, Starter Article, and References: -Your entire page was well worded and interesting while also being forward about the facts of your language. -I edited some formatting errors, but nothing too major. Some Corrections you should make: -Take out "This starter article will serve as an introduction" right under the Lead Section Heading. -Take out "The following work will primarily discuss..." in the Lead Section. => These phrases are unnecessary as they are too wordy, and no description regarding the language and article itself are needed, you can just get right to the facts. -In your "Sociolinguistic Overview," I thought the chart was very informative and provided a lot of useful information for the reader. -Take out "the figures were gathered from the EULA..." right under the Sociolinguistic Overview. Just cite this information right by the chart instead of explicitly spelling out where the information came from. Overall, very informative and structurally it is good, just consider the above changes. Ec725 (talk) 01:11, 5 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Matthew! I think your work is very informative. I especially think the "Algherese Dialect(Starter Article)" section has some great information; the way you wrote about the history is easy to read and to follow. I also liked that you are including the current state of the dialect and I think it's amazing that you found information about it being used in schools. One problem I did see is that your headings aren't named correctly. Be sure to use the WikiProject Languages Template so you know what each section should look like. As mentioned by another student, you should get rid of the "This starter article will serve as introduction to the origins of the Algherese dialect." Instead, just jump into the article and include any other names that the dialect is known by. Yfortuna96 (talk) 20:56, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]