User talk:Mangolava/secondary craters sandbox

Suggestions from Rob Narmour

Well done Sam. This is an interesting topic and the abstract of the page is really good. Make sure you place the reference numbers outside of the period at the end of a sentence, you had a few that were put before or we're double spaced behind the period. The images are good, although I suggest condensing the text in the cartoon a bit. In the examples section I think it would be cool to expound a little on the secondary craters on those planetary bodies if there is any info available. Overall it looks good!

Suggestions from Shelby

Under your formation paragraph, with the 1. 2. 3., you first condition is formatted differently than your second two conditions. Perhaps you should write something along the lines of "Primary craters must be present", to be consistent. Also, under examples, it would be much more helpful if you had specific secondary-craters, primary craters, or even regions with secondary craters, rather than whole planets. It also would be helpful to extend your references to more than 6. Interesting topic. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sjoh197 (talk • contribs) 00:11, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions from Citra

Hi Sam! Your draft so far is pretty good. I really like the images on your page. You have a good amount of pictures to support your content. Maybe you want to put more description of your pictures in the text, so it would have a better relationship between the two. The content of your topic is also pretty easy to understand, although I did see some minor grammatical errors. To make your page better, I think you should put more explanation/description under the Examples and the Distinguishing Factors sections. Also, adding more references to your page is a not a bad idea. Planetarysprotege (talk) 02:36, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Adam

You kept your article very broad and informative in an easy to read way. Good work. The original artwork is awesome. I believe the crater chain and ejecta pictures could be rearranged to be more beneficial. Also, so pictures at the bottom could help out as well. The top has a few, but it gets more scarce at the bottom. You could also provide more links to other pages in your words, ie. comets, asteroids, etc. Most people know those, but there are some in there that could use a link in case the reader doesn't. Adamwalsh93 (talk) 12:59, 31 March 2015 (UTC)Adam[reply]