User talk:Madimargolis/sandbox

Hey Madi, this is Mike Nuccio with (finally) my little bit of peer review. I'm sorry this has taken so long. I've sent you an email with a slight explanation that you can feel free to CC to Dr. Dove if you wish. This is all on me, though, you contacted me 8th and I still hadn't gotten back to you on it.

I think your lead-in (first paragraph) should maybe be a little bit more of a general overview of the concept compared to what you have now. Right now it's very much detailing the origin of the term and a lot of one specific (the original) author's work.

It might be best to cite Eisler's work as fact, and list Eisler as a reference, without necessarily referring to Eisler in the body of the article so often? Forgive me, I'm mining for suggestions by this point.

Also, considering that this concept no doubt stretches back to the dawn of man, I might suggest finding earlier manifestations in history than Hitler's Germany Thepinkservbot (talk) 15:19, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments! I agree that the overview could be more general, so I will definitely incorporate that. I'll also look for earlier examples to help expand on this. Madimargolis (talk) 09:23, 15 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

comments from Dr. Dove

Hi Madi,

I think this looks good for a start; you've got a number of relevant sections you still need to flesh out and I like how you've found relevant articles/sources that do not necessarily stem exactly from the novel but still address the same concept. Make sure to also include any relevant internal links (to other Wikipedia articles that seem important) and keep going in the direction you're going--fleshing out your additions.

Adovevie (talk) 20:20, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]