User talk:MaM4213/sandbox

Many celebrities use this form of hair coloring that is different from using foils for highlights. It creates a more natural look that requires less maintenance. It allows hair stylist more freedom while using a form of paint to color hair.

Things to improve

Try to add some more sources to improve the reliability of your information and also try to add some wikilinks to your article. Also try to add to the process part of your article. Explain like what hydrated hair is and how to get it, then just go into more detail overall in that section. This will make it not only longer, but more people will be able to follow along with the article. Try and see if you can find in why neon was popular in the start and then why it transitioned into more of the opposite color of your hair.Ashkupka (talk) 16:59, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Potential Section

I think adding a section that focuses on current day notable people that use this trend would be a good way to get attention on the article. You already mention Demi Lovoto, which is a step in the right direction. I would continue to add people to the article. Wciupa (talk) 16:33, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback

The introduction paragraph is very well written and is a great start to your article. It summarizes the information in the body of the article very well and is a strong start. I would try to add more wiki-links still, but the organization and content is very balanced and is written in a neutral tone. I would try to find an image or two to show the reader what it looks like and better their understanding of the article. I will look to see if the links work, but so far your citations look good. I would try to find more to improve the strength and make sure that they are the best sources available. Overall there doesn't seem to be any gaps in your article and everything seems relevant to your topic with good organization. Ashkupka (talk) 17:11, 24 October 2018 (UTC)