User talk:Lyavari
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[edit]Hello, Lyavari, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:18, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
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[edit]Agnes Varda
The Agnes Varda article seems to have more information on her as opposed to other filmmakers that we have seen thus far, which is a good sign but also leaves more room for updates as she is still an active filmmaker. That is one of the major points that I would add on to in your article, for example, her recognition at the Academy Awards this year. I would also say that the section on her "style" seems to be a bit mixed together and could be elaborated on in terms of her feminist filmmaking, and I know that there are a lot of scholarly sources about Varda's auteur style. It is so notable that she is the only woman in the French New Wave and this should definitely get more attention.
I see that you noted that the article has several grammatical errors, which need to be fixed. Other than that, I think that the tone of the article is very factual and does not present any bias, sections just need elaboration.
Maya Deren
The addition of information on each individual movie by Deren is a fantastic addition to her sparse Wikipedia page. As well as the lengthy addition you have added to her early life, which really rounds her out holistically as a filmmaker and figure. I also think that you have done an incredible job of writing on her possible influences and once these have sources, these are great additions to her page. The only thing I would say is to make sure that this section on possible influences is backed up with as much evidence as possible because otherwise it can be seen as you analyzing her films, which is not the typical non-bias route that Wikipedia requires in their articles.