User talk:LumpyRee
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 00:51, 19 February 2021 (UTC)
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[edit]The article I chose to edit is "World War Memorial" : https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/World_War_Memorial_(Kimball,_West_Virginia)LumpyRee (talk) 20:50, 24 February 2021 (UTC) My proposed edit for this article is : https://docs.google.com/document/d/1O3zwleB0l01BDmWE5IPD8nos7Z7x35awgtvDPxwJg0M/edit?usp=sharingLumpyRee (talk) 20:50, 24 February 2021 (UTC)
- Peer Review - Sami
I think that the edit that has been done to the article is so important because it makes it a lot better and organized. The revised article and the old article are so different in a way which is the new one is much better. The revised article has a lot more information. The information which is in the revised article is really important as it shows the importance of the place which is the article about.
In the revised article, there are headings and sections which are really important so the reader can know what is he reading about and identify each section clearly. However, I think that the conclusion section does not need to be on the page because the present section is enough to end the page with, where the reader will have a background about the place in the past and the present and everything else will be mentioned above. Besides, I think that the heading which is called "Building" can be replaced with a better phrase because it might confuse the reader.
This edit improves the original article very much because the original article is really short and there a lot of things that are missing in the article and needs to be added. I believe that this edit address these points and the things which are missing. Improvements can be made to this edit to make it slightly better. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sam254254 (talk • contribs) 07:21, 25 February 2021 (UTC)
- @LumpyRee: Hi Reema, Dr. Sarraf here. Can you please edit your Google Document to more clearly show to peer reviewers what changes you're making to the original document (EX: use yellow highlighter to show your additions?)? Otherwise, we'll have to toggle between your Google Document and the article page, which is a bit inconvenient. You might also want to show, on this talk page itself, the original passage, your proposed revision, and your justification. Please see other classmates' posts for ideas on how to format your peer review page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Skiv99!KjessJKT (talk) 14:19, 25 February 2021 (UTC)