User talk:Lsalimbangon
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:45, 22 January 2016 (UTC)
Sea salt
[edit]Hi Lsalimbangon. I see that you have run into some problems with the sea salt article. I will try to help. Whatever you do, please don't re-insert material when someone else undoes your edit. Stop and talk, figure out what the problem is. Repeatedly re-inserting material is considered "edit warring" in Wikipedia and it can lead to unhappy outcomes. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:22, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
- History of sea salt
Sea salt was discovered several thousand years ago, and continues to play important roles in human life, namely: food, tradition, mythology, medical treatment, religion and economy.
The first problem with this sentence is that it's unsourced. There's no way for the reader to know where you got this information, and whether it's something they should trust. The second problem is one of tone. "Several thousand years ago" is too vague. When was it discovered, or when was it first used? By whom? Based on what evidence? If you look at the Historical production section below, you'll see how they do it - mention when there's evidence that it was first used. and is fairly vague. The second part of the sentence is unsourced.
The Phoenician people were believed to have mastered the extraction and trade of salt. However, it was the Romans who actually explored salt trading worldwide. As such, created a "salt route" to areas that did not have access to salt.
Believed by whom? You can't say "believed" without specifying who did the believing. What does "actually explored salt trading" mean? The third sentence also is missing something - maybe the word "they"? When you say that the Romans traded salt, be specific. What's your source? To what areas did they do this trading?
The salt trading did not only help boost economies involved, but it also brought about the building and construction of new cities along the "salt route". For example, the city of Salzburg (which literally means "the city of salt") was originally developed along Salaria, the road of salt in Italy.[1] In addition, salt was also used as currency to in various regions.[2]
Here you get more specific, which is good, but your source is the Malden Salt Company. This isn't a scholarly source, it's the website of a company promoting its product. That doesn't meet Wikipedia's standards for reliable sources. You mention salaria; there's an article on Salt roads that tells a lot more of the story - link to it, incorporate it. That way readers can learn more.
In the past, sick people were soaked into salt springs, which were believed to heal their illnesses. Nowadays, spas offer luxurious salt treatments such sea salt scrubs and salt baths.[3]
"In the past" is too vague. Does that mean 20 years ago, or 2000? And where? Was it something they only did in Italy? Was it throughout Europe? Throughout the world? "Nowadays" is also vague, and it's rather informal. Again - RealSalt isn't a scholarly source. Look for journal articles or textbooks, not websites of people trying to sell salt.
Salt has also been mythologized in different religions. Ancient Hebrews believed that salt was the symbol for the joy of join around table and having their food. In Romans' tradition, a piece of salt was rubbed on the baby in his eighth day of birth to expel demons and evils. Moreover, offering bread and salt to visitors in ancient Rome was considered as hospitality. [2] In countries such as Scotland, Also, dropping the salt on floor was considered as bad luck. Some people speculate that salt was used metaphorically in Da Vinci's Last Supper, wherein Judas, who had betrayed Jesus, had carelessly dropped salt in front of him.[1]
Again, "SeaSalt.com" isn't a scholarly source. Try Google Scholar or your library's search functions. Also, when writing about something as universal as this, try to be more global in your examples. There are documented cultural uses of salt throughout the world. Make sure that you aren't perpetrating the narrow view that everything important in history happened in Europe.
I hope this helps as you improve that section. And when you rework it, try to tie it into the existing Historical production section. If this isn't clear, I'm happy to clarify. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:54, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
References
- ^ a b SaltWorks (2001). History of salt. Retrieved March 21, 2016, from https://www.seasalt.com/salt-101/history-of-salt/
- ^ a b Malden Salt Company (1882). Salt-An Amazing History. Retrieved March 21, 2016, from http://www.maldonsalt.co.uk/About-Salt-Salt-an-amazing-history.html
- ^ Real Salt (n.d). A brief history of salt. Retrieved March 21, 2016, from http://www.realsalt.com/sea-salt/a-brief-history-of-salt/
One more thing - in the Modern production section you have a footnote - [8] - that's not an actual note. It doesn't connect to anything. I think you probably copied it from your draft instead of copying the reference. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:17, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
Please
[edit]As I said above, please stop and talk, figure out what the problem is. Please engage Pinkbeast in a discussion. Thank you. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:40, 24 March 2016 (UTC)