User talk:LewisKurschner/sandbox
HMB436 Peer commentary
[edit]Hi Lewis, I'm a classmate of yours from HMB436. Pretty interesting that you included a genome sequencing section. I would definitely suggest expanding the toxicity component of your article. And don't forget to make your taxobox! Under growth and morphology, you put a great deal of information on their conidia, which is great. However, you might want to add more of the basics, such as their asexual/sexuality, growth forms, etc. Also, in addition to sapotrophy you might want to add some common food sources they invade. Overall, you've got most of the basic points down, now all you have to do is put it together. Keep up the work!
--Cjchan2016 (talk) 16:44, 29 October 2015 (UTC)
Hey Lewis, I just read your draft article and I think you have a good level of detail! Here are a few comments:
- You should make sure you cite your sources for any information you got from an external source. There are a few instances where I think a citation would be appropriate, such as for the width and length of the conidiophores and the diameter of the conidia.
- Whenever you use jargon (i.e. "globoid", "conidia", "conidiophores", etc.) you should probably like the words to their wikipedia page or a related page if they have one. It'll help the reader if they don't know what a particular word means.
- I'm not too sure the first sentence in the "Effects on humans" section really belongs in that section. You could merge "Toxicity" and "Effects on humans" into one larger section name "Pathogenicity" or something along those lines, although this is a minor structural change.
- I like that you added a genome sequencing section; it's interesting that this fungus' genome has been sequenced. Do you know if there was any reason for this sequencing? (i.e. clinical or agricultural importance) You mention that some genes associated with resistance to antifungal drugs have been found. My fungus (Cladosporium cladosporioides) produces antifungal compounds targeted towards plant tissue so yours may do the same since it's in the same genus. If it does produce antifungal compounds, you may want to mention that in the "Physiology" section and maybe mention what these compounds target.
You do have a wide range of information on your fungus, which is great! Now all you have to do is elaborate a bit more on some of the facts you have and you'll be well on your way to having a complete article!