User talk:Kolby Arnold/sandbox

Peer Review

Kolby, the way that you have organized your article in your sandbox is well thought out and easy to read. I like how you have put headings on all of your sections and have bulleted the information. It is also good to distinguish this disease from autism as they can sometimes be confused. Does the article have a specific physical therapy section and how PT can be beneficial? Are there any other treatment methods such as OT that can be helpful with this diagnosis?Wacomer (talk) 22:59, 12 October 2017 (UTC)

I agree Rachel, I also like the easy to read headings and the bulleted items. In the article I am editing we also had a missing physical therapy section, which is an important treatment method in most of these pediatric cases. Cushmank (talk) 20:57, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Kolby! I also think that your edits to your topic is well thought out. I am also making edits to my group's treatment section and I really like how you gave examples of what to do and at what time of day. I saw that you have some sources but they don't start until the "at night" section, maybe add some sources to the "at dinnertime", "after school", and "in the morning" sections? I am also curious if there is any ground breaking new research on the treatment of sensory processing disorder that you can include? Cushmank (talk) 23:58, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Kolby, Sam, and Taylor, I like the format of your article as it is very easy to read. I also was very interested by your topic as I had not known much about SPD and would have made the confusion with Autism as discussed in the article. I agree with Sarah in that I like how you mention the outdated-ness of many of the articles. I think that you could improve the article by adding in some page links so that the reader can more easily look up subjects that they do not understand. Also, if there is more research regarding your applications section with the schedule that may help the credibility of your article be increased. Sharrow96 (talk)

Hi Stephen! I also think that page links are a great tool to use in an article because it allows the reader to further investigate topics they are not familiar with. Cushmank (talk) 20:57, 18 October 2017 (UTC)