User talk:Kloesimone01/sandbox

Jonathan Clark Peer review

Change She's taken to She's taking. --Jclark17 (talk) 03:40, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The way your talking it seems like your speaking more about Trayvon Martin's mother then the big thing which is the movement. --Jclark17 (talk) 03:40, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I like your idea but it seems like you're talking more about the mothers than the actual movement. Include information about what their goals are as a movement and what they want to get done rather than as individuals. I like how you talked about the mothers' contribution, just talk more about how the mothers recuperated from their sons' death. Jordanspen (talk) 02:36, 8 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]