User talk:KipAmbrose12/sandbox
Peer review completed by Katie Seliga
[edit]1. Introductory Sentence: Does the introductory sentence state article topic concisely and accurately in a single sentence? If not, how might the writer revise her introductory sentence? Yes, the introductory sentence/section state the article topic concisely and accurately. It does not state it in a single sentence, but a few sentences are needed to provide background information the song and let readers know that this article is specifically about the song and the meaning behind it.
2. Summary: Does the lead section summarize all major points in the article? If not, what’s missing? The lead section does summarize all major points in the article. I was a little surprised to read the content regarding Kesha and Dr. Luke. It might be nice to add that to the introductory sentence, if that can be tied in somehow.
Context:Is the information included in the summary also present in the body of the article? If not, what needs to be removed from the summary? Yes, all of the information in the summary is present in the body of the article. I liked how the hint of the reasoning behind her song was discussed in more detail throughout the article.
4. Organization Are the topics well-organized and divided by headings and subheadings? Does the article cover the topic in organized, logical fashion? If not, how might the author consider revising the article to improve the organization? Yes, all of the topics are well-organized and divided by heading and subheading. The article has a very nice flow and logical order to it.
5.Content Has the author added sections added to cover the topic more broadly and fill some existing gaps? If so, what are those additions? What else might be added? The author has added sections that cover the topic more broadly. A addition that could be added is a heading or subheading that discusses the public's response to her song. For example, potentially some reviews, or articles where people discuss how the song has helped them or been relatable to them in life.
6. What smaller additions has the author added to relevant sections of the article? What else should the author consider adding or changing? The author added a lot of information regarding the music video that discussed the content of the music video. The author also added a section discussing Kesha's experience making the music video. The review section that I mentioned above could be a nice addition, if that information is able to be found
7. Is the coverage of the topic balanced? If not, what could the author add or change to make it seem more balanced? Where does the author present information in a tone appropriate for an encyclopedia? Do you think you could guess the perspective of the author by reading the article? The coverage of the topic was well balanced. The terms and tones were neutral, and did not seem biased at all. The perspective of the author was not able to be guessed from reading the article. Here are some questions to consider that will help you address issues of balance and neutrality: • Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y." There are no words or phrases that do not seem neutral. • Does the article make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people? For example, "some people say..." The article does not make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people. • Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Remember, neutral doesn't mean "the best positive light" or "the worst, most critical light." It means a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic. The article did not focus attention more so on negative or positive information. There was a mix of both, showing her struggles and showing her accomplishments. Where might the author consider revising the essay to make the tone sound more like that of an encyclopedia and less like an argument? No revisions need to be made.
8.Citations Is every statement associated with a supporting reference? If not, mark the statements are missing supporting references? None of the statements were associated with a supporting reference. To put a supporting reference after a sentence, click after the period/punctuation mark at the end of the statement, click "cite" at the top banner, copy and paste website address that you received the information, click generate. A little number should appear by that statement and the link should be placed at the bottom of the article under references next to the number that follows after the statement.
9. Sources Are the sources cited the best available on the topic? Are they appropriate for the discipline/genre? If not, which sources might need to be changed? Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, do they lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single point of view? I could not find/evaluate the sources that the author added to the page. All of the sources listed had been retrieved at dates earlier than this assignment was posted and were used in the original wiki. Most of the references and sources provided seemed to be billboard rankings and did not have much content. Also, whenever Kesha is mentioned, or another popular word/subject etc. is mentioned an associated link could be placed to allow the readers to get more information in regards to that topic. The associated links send readers to a Wiki page that discussed that topic. A link the the Kesha Wiki would a nice reference because that page is full of content and provides more background on her etc. To add the associated link type two brackets [ then type the word or subject, then type 2 more brackets. A box with different Wiki pages related to that topic pop up and choose the page you want it to link to.
Completeness Do the references include completely filled out citation templates? If not, which ones need to be filled out? The references do not include the completely filled out citation template. I believe that those templates will appear completely filled out once the source citing are completed.
Peer Review by Marissa Cuevas
[edit]Does the introductory sentence state the article topic concisely and accurately in a single sentence? If not, how might the writer revise her introductory sentence? Yes, the introductory sentence states the topic of the article very accurately and concisely. It provides the basic background information needed to give the readers an idea of what the topic is and who created it.
Does the lead section summarize all major points in the article? If not, what's missing? The lead section overall does summarize all the major points within the article. Except I did not see anything about her case with Dr. Luke in the intro or the release of her music video.
Is the information included in the summary also present in the body of the article? If not, what needs to be removed from the summary? Yes, all of the information in the introduction section is included throughout the article except for those few that I put in the question above that aren't included in the introduction but included as separate paragraphs in the article.
Are the topics well organized and divided by headings and subheadings? Does the article cover the topic in organized, logical fashion? If not, how might the author consider revising the article to improve the organization? Yes, all of the different sections are divided by subheadings in a well-organized matter. Each section is ordered logically that makes sense.
Has the author added sections that cover the topic more broadly and fill some existing gaps? If so what are those additions? What else might be added? Yes, the author has added sections that go deeper into the topic. Some of those additions that I really liked was the music video and live performances. You could consider adding any critical reviews that were made after she released the song.
Is the coverage of the topic balanced? If not, what could the author add or change to make it seem more balanced? Where does the author present information in a tone appropriate for an encyclopedia? Do you think you could guess the perspective of the author by reading the article? The tone of the author is very balanced and neutral. The author also didn't lead more towards one perspective or away from another. The author steered away from making any claims on behalf of a specific group of people.
Is every statement associated with a supporting reference? If not, mark the statements that are missing supporting references. I did see a few supporting references in the section about Kesha vs. Dr. Luke, but I did not see any other ones on any of the other paragraphs. Keep looking for credible sources to cite where you got your information from such as the article you found on Huffington Post.
Do the references include completely filled out citation templates? Yes for the sources that are currently included they are completely filled out in citation templates. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marissa cuevas (talk • contribs) 22:52, 23 April 2018 (UTC)