User talk:Kingsleyta

Hi Tara! I see you signed up to edit my article. I just wanted to let you know that for now my article draft is on my Sandbox page here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Deitkm/sandbox

Hi Tara, I've read your article and have a few comments and suggestions that will hopefully help you finalize your page. A few minor things, I saw in the banner, they've asked you to add more links. I saw potential wiki links that could be added for any documents, places, institutions or acts that were important and might have a page.

Also in your Ethnolinguistic paragraph you use the word curricula. I assumed you meant curriculum.

The beginning of the public response section was a little awkward and hard to follow. The first three sentences seem to be saying the same thing but you present them as opposite to each other. Maybe you could clear that up.

Overall, I think this is a great article, you've followed the guidelines well and no major aspects of the topic seem missing to me as a reader. My recommendation would be to tighten up the structure of the paragraphs. I found myself thinking some sentences belonged in other areas of their sections. Also when you transition between small ideas, like describing the mission of PRONEBI then continue with their five year goal, the point of each sentence is not always clear right away. I think if you start transition sentences like that with their point right away it will make it easier to follow when reading. Making the structure of each paragraph and the overall sections will help the reader understand your point. Dvine16 (talk) 22:23, 7 April 2015 (UTC)