User talk:Kimberlytemme/sandbox

Article Review

I think you've organized your article revision really well. You seem to have plenty of reliable sources to back up your compiled information. I might work on the sentence structure a bit- it's somewhat passive. For example, instead of "The people who offered kore statues were both men and women.[2] How elaborate the statue was varied between each one," you could say, "Both men and women offered kore statues.[2] Each one varies in terms of elaboration and intricacy." Small edits and rearrangements like this might make your article additions more readable, and make the article clearer. I think you've done a great job of putting together neutral and relevant information. I would have suggested other relevant material, but you seem to have a good plan, and your work in progress is coming along well. I mean, you have a good sense of what needs to be included, even if it's not in your sandbox yet. This article has an encyclopedic tone, and it feels like it belongs on this site. You're doing a great job! Good luck and have fun finishing! Rachelesanders (talk) 16:22, 26 October 2017 (UTC)Rachel Sanders