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Peer Review of Fatigue Article - Mike Moore
[edit]Ike, the draft article is very well done. The headers each make sense and flow into the next topic nicely. The material is written in a way that is easy to understand and the points are nicely sourced. The use of the graph is a nice touch as well. Not that it needs any improvement, but if you wanted to add an image of some fatigue failures that may be helpful.
Peer Review of Fatigue Article by Leslie D
[edit]Very polished and thorough article for such a big topic!
Here's the Wikipedia checklist with my comments following:
- Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? Yes, definitely & no, no distractions
- Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Looks good - thankfully this is engineering and not politics!
- Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Nope
- Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? There's some text at the end of the 2nd reference that looks a bit funny: "Check date values in: |date= (help)". I know there are dozens, probably hundreds, of possible references but I've been using the Fatigue and Fracture - Understanding the Basics (ISBN 1615039767) e-book through the OSU Library like crazy. The writing is a little more simple but still detailed information, which seems to match Wikipedia. I highly recommend it as a source if you're looking for another one at any point and the beginning of Chapter 5 has some info that might fit well in your last section on avoiding failures.
- Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? Looks good!
- Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added? No and nothing immediate. We have to leave some for future classes :)
A few grammar suggestions: 1. First paragraph: "Throughout a welded assemblies life" should probably be "Throughout a welded assembly's life" or "Throughout the life of a welded assembly" 2. Material type, 2nd and 4th sentences: "materials ultimate tensile strength..." should be "material's ultimate..." 3. Suggestion for the 1st sentence under Surrounding Environments: "The surrounding environment can affect the fatigue life of a welded assembly, often lowering it."
Don't hesitate to ask if you want me to look at anything else. Tenabroc (talk) 04:31, 17 November 2017 (UTC)