User talk:Kenziewalker22/sandbox

Diana Bolivar Peer Review

This is a super interesting topic, a very in-depth and sentimental, there are tons or resources and information on this topic. I believe this topic to be a pre existing problem like you mentioned and also a current problem.

When you said most common among men? what about teens? Teen suffer a lot from isolation dude to depression and bullying, Mention isolation from families and interest in the first paragraph not the last. Question, when you say “Men” is it about their masculinity? Sexuality? or??

You stated a statistic of the men in Sweden… How about its the United States?

Now with the the ”Emotional Isolation in Relationships" subcategory” “it is a well structured and thought out paragraph, what your saying makes sense but I’m wondering when you say they seek out therapist, would it be recommended alone or “marriage consuseling”

The examples you stated are so great, they’re relatable and understandable. It kind of unfolds a commence, then a problem, reasoning and then a solution. The words “distorted beliefs about himself” was precise, most that feel alone make up scenarios and thoughts about him/her self and others around them. Is there any problems down the line (especially health related) if you surround yourself with too many animals? I am aware that the example only said “one pet cat” but there is a show on TV called “animal hoarders” or “Hoarders” Does it correlate?

brain reaction?? Super cool! Maybe find a picture with that part of the brain you’re talking about lighting up.

Maybe put wiki links of depression and other mental illness. Does this lead to sucicde? Great topic and it was executed very well. @Kenziewalker22: --Dianaboli18 (talk) 18:54, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Thanks so much for mentioning that. Very helpful. I will add more information entailing statistics of emotional isolation in teens, etc. @Dianaboli18: --User:Kenziewalker22 Kenziewalker22 (talk) 20:16, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Prof Garcia's Comments

@Kenziewalker22: Well done beginning to move your stuff over to the mainspace, Mackenzie! You still have a lot of work to do, however, with the remaining content that you have in your sandbox. Make sure that you clean up those citations so that you don't have parenthetical citations but rather are citing the material in the style of Wikipedia. As you finish up everything, make sure that you are moving the content bit by bit and formatting it correctly. Best of luck finishing up. Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:58, 4 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]