User talk:Kelsey1108/Personal Sandbox

I really love your piece. I like the breakdown of the individual soil epidemics in each world and the description of those affected. My only suggestion would be to include other legit links within the piece, whether they be from Wikipedia or from somewhere else. The more information that can linked to from this article, the better. Great job. Pseaton (talk) 20:43, 25 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The lead section has some minor inconsistency issues, sometimes Virgin Soil Epidemic is in all caps, sometimes it's not. Otherwise, very well organized, very informational. The length of the sections is short enough that they are still engaging. Good length. Maybe clean up lead section a little more, though. Could be more concise. (areimold (talk) 22:33, 25 November 2011 (UTC))[reply]

For the lead I would use the last paragraph first, because it defines Virgin Soil Epidemic from the get go. Also, some points are repeated in the lead. I like that you included some historical background to the topic to give the reader a better overall understanding. I also like that you added prevention as a subtopic. I feel that there was a colony that disappeared in the early settlement ages of America but later historians found out it was because of a disease. If you looked into that and there is some info and facts to it I would definitely add that to the Wiki page. Smrose788 (talk) 19:16, 27 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This piece is very informative and interesting. You format is on point and the sections are well split up. Your lead section could be shorter, I am not sure if you need to go into detail about what each of the virgin soil epidemics were. You could maybe define it and just let the reader read on to find out the different examples of it. Mregan5 (talk) 00:00, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This narrative is very good and informative with minor issues. Your breakdown of the Virgin Soil Epidemic was consistent and very detailed. However, I do not believe your lead section should be so "beefed up". If that section was cleaned up and brief, I believe this narrative would be just right. Besides that, its very good! AJC301 (talk) 12:12, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The organization and set up of your article is perfect; and your article is full of important information/description about the epidemic. The only issues I have with the article is grammar (spelling, captialization, etc) that isn't consistent. Overall, solid! Cait.cowan (talk) 13:30, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm curious as to how people of the time period reacted towards these epidemics? Besides the statistics occurring within the different New World epidemics, what sort of personal reaction did the citizens have? Did it bring large scale fear? Witch burnings? Yobolehobo (talk) 19:21, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]