User talk:Kellyshen621/sandbox
Hey Kelly!
I really liked the edits you made for Jorge Ramos' article. I feel like you could actually create a separate section on the 2016 election for Ramos' career. It has really pushed him more into the national spotlight (His Time 100 Feature recently wasn't an accident). This gives you more space to elaborate and pull more from the sources you have.
For Sophie Cruz the intro blurb could be cleaner. It's not immediately apparent that she is a young girl and what her background actually is. The descriptions could also be "tighter". "Sophie made a second splash" could be reworded differently, what makes that her second splash?
I agree that Minuteman Project needs to have some more background (instead jumping directly into incidents). After reading your sources, I also feel like it would be cool to add some up to date information about them. What are they doing now? (Last year they stormed the Mexican embassy) How do they interact with organizations that actually advocate for immigration reform?
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