User talk:Kdaehlin/sandbox

O'Neill, Onora. Autonomy and Trust in Bioethics. Cambridge: Cambridge University Press, 2002. Internet resource.

Häyry, Matti, Tuija Takala, and Peter Herissone-Kelly. Bioethics and Social Reality. Amsterdam: Rodopi, 2005. Web. Value inquiry book series ; Values in bioethics, v. 165; Value inquiry book series, v. 165; Value inquiry book series, Values in bioethics.6190184.

Institute of Medical Ethics (Great Britain), and British Medical Association. Medical Humanities.London: BMJ Pub. Group, 2000. Web.

Here are a couple of sources I have started to look at. I wanted to add more information to the medical ethics portion specifically.

Kdaehlin (talk) 04:22, 22 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I thought you had really strong additions. My only suggestions are grammar related suggestions. I would just read through it again carefully to look for specific grammar fixes. Here are some of my suggestions. When you say "the physicians concern", add an apostrophe to make it physician's. You said "practice can help physician make moral decisions", and I think you need to add the word "the" to say "can help the physician make moral decisions". I think i might suggest rewording the sentence "As a scholarly discipline, medical ethics encompasses its practical application in clinical settings as well as work on its history, philosophy, theology, and sociology." Maybe just reword the "as well as work on its history etc." because i'm not sure I completely understand what it is saying. The sentence "Biotechnology generally focuses on molecular biology which, can help improve the health of humans as well as prolong the lifespan of humans" I think I would either take out the comma or put it after the word biology. When you mention the "health care and research community" I would say combine health and care to make it one word since that is how you use it later on. Lastly, the last sentence where it says "Some may believe everyone should have the same health care compared to people who believe healthcare should be distributed based off medical need", I would maybe put a comma after healthcare so it says "the same health care, compared to people.....". Other than a couple grammar things i think you did a really good job! Britajacobson (talk) 03:34, 9 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]