User talk:KatinaMarie/sandbox
First, all this should be in the Sandbox, not Sandbox Talk.
In Doreen Kimura's wiki page, there could be a section where it talks about her article she wrote about the sex differences in the brain. They mention her books, but this article was also important to her name too.
These are some references that aren't in her wiki page so far.
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tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).https://www2.nau.edu/~bio372-c/class/behavior/sexdif1.htm
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tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).http://www.psychology.uwo.ca/people/faculty/remembrance/kimura.html
KatinaMarie (talk) 04:30, 20 February 2018 (UTC)
I don't see two questions for me. That was part of the assignment. J.R. Council (talk) 04:08, 6 March 2018 (UTC)
Assignment 4
[edit]One of the things that I noticed when looking at the page and also the talk page for Doreen is that it did not include much about her personal life. Someone who claims to be her daughter had written a lot about her marriages and family growing up, but it is not included on the page. If we could find some information on that, it could help to round out the page a little. Another thing that I noticed is that they do not discuss her contribution to dichotic processing very much. They only briefly mention it.
This material should be added.
Some sources that could potentially be useful include Doreem's article, "The Asymmetry of the Human Brain", published in the Scientific American (1973), and her article, "From Ear to Brain", published in Brain and Cognition (2011), where she discusses dichotic processing.
Questions: If prior editors cited a source, can we still use that source to add more information that they might not have included in the page?
Yes, definitely.
Also I'm struggling to find information on her personal life that is not from a website.
A site like Psychology's Feminist Voices is certainly ok. Not all websites lack credibility. Also, look for obituaries. I'm sure she has an obit in American Psychologist and other professional journals. J.R. Council (talk) 04:08, 6 March 2018 (UTC)
KelseaC (talk) 04:15, 21 February 2018 (UTC)
To Do List
[edit]- Find info on family and personal life
- Find more info on contributions to dichotic listening
- Find more info on contributions to sex and cognition
- Find info on her schooling and academic life
- List of awards she has received
KelseaC (talk) 20:13, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
Outline
[edit]A) Intro B) Childhood/Early Life C) Academic Life D) Career
1) Sex and Cognition 2) Dichotic Listening
E) Awards and Recognition F) Personal Life G) Books H) References I) External Links
- Information that is already included on the page is in Italics.
KelseaC (talk) 20:27, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
- I'm not sure why this is showing up weird and not as a list.
KelseaC (talk) 20:32, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
References
[edit]- "The Asymmetry of the Human Brain", published in the Scientific American (1973)
- "From Ear to Brain", published in Brain and Cognition (2011)
- http://www.psychology.uwo.ca/people/faculty/remembrance/kimura.html
KelseaC (talk) 20:48, 20 March 2018 (UTC)
Lead Section - Katina Rorvig
[edit]Doreen Kimura (born Doreen Gobel in 1933 in Winnipeg, Manitoba). She was a Canadian psychologist who won a scholarship to McGill University. Doreen completed her Bachelors, masters, and doctoral degree at McGill. Doreen worked at the University of Western Ontario as a professor. Doreen also worked as a professor emeritus at Simon Fraser University. Doreen had two sisters; was married and had two daughters and was also a grandmother. Doreen’s interest was in sex and intelligence. Doreen supported the idea that there are differences in males and female’s representation in science. Doreen also supported the concept of the biological origin of differences in cognitive ability between male and females.
Doreen was won many awards throughout her life. Just to name a few they were – Canadian psychology association award for distinguished contributions to Canadian psychology as a science in 1985. Canadian association award for outstanding scientific achievement in 1986. Sterling prize in support of controversy, Simon Fraser University 2000. And the Kistler prize in 2006. She also wrote two books Neuromotor mechanism in human communication in 93 and sex and cognition in 2000.
Doreen passed away at the age of 80 in Vancouver, British Columbia 16:12, 27 March 2018 (UTC)KatinaMarie (talk)
- I thought you did a really good job at summarizing all of the information. There were a few minor typos (Doreen was won...) but nothing too huge. I would maybe combine the two sentences about her going to McGill and the two about her teaching at UWO and SFU. One other thing I noticed was that you put the full years for everything except her book in communication. Other than that, I really enjoyed it.
- KelseaC (talk) 05:55, 28 March 2018 (UTC)
Feedback
[edit]@KatinaMarie and KelseaC: Nice start on your draft, but it still needs some work
- Readers need to be able to connect every statement in the article with a supporting citation. Citations need to appear after the statements they support. You need to replace your current reference list with properly-formatted inline citations. If you aren’t sure how to do this, please revisit the section of the training module beginning on this page.
- I don't believe that thinkinghousewife.com meets Wikipedia's requirements for a reliable source. The sources they link to might be appropriate, but the blog itself is not.
- You jump from "early life and education" to "achievements and recognition", which skips entirely over the most important parts of the article - her career and contributions to science.
- You can't lump published works with awards. These are two very different things. Published works should focus on notable works - an article in Scientific American is unlikely to be a major work. Awards should focus on notable awards.
- You need to include links to other Wikipedia articles. Topics and terms that are likely to be unfamiliar to the average reader should be linked the first time they appear in the article.
- Section headers use sentence capitalization, not title capitalization; only the first word of the title, and proper nouns, should be capitalized. For the most part, you should avoid "/" in section headers - "and" is better if you're going to combine two things. Italics should only be used for things like book titles. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:30, 4 May 2018 (UTC)