User talk:KHarmon16
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[edit]Hello, KHarmon16, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:26, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
Your draft
[edit]Hi. I moved your draft back to your sandbox because it isn't ready for mainspace yet.
Your tone isn't right for an encyclopaedia article. For example, your lead says
Joseph Baxter was a man who did many great things in life. Preaching to people, even preaching and talking to the local Indians trying to bridge the gap between them and the white men.
Saying that he did "many great things in life" is both filler (there's really no specific information in there) and an opinion ("great things" have no objective definition). The second sentence is a sentence fragment, and doesn't adequately summarize all the major points of the article. What do you mean by "preaching to people"? What does "local Indians" mean? You haven't, up to that point, even specified where or when Baxter lived.
He was always said to be a very smart young man
You can't use the passive voice in a statement like this. Words are said by people, and they are said at some point in time, not "always.
He first preached in Medfield at 18
Preached what? Where is Medfield? You need to specify things like religion and denomination, and you need to specify where this is.
His hope was to educate them about God
"Educate them about God" isn't neutral. His goal was to convert them to his religion.
This is just a sample of the issues. You need to keep in mind that many of your readers know nothing about life in the early colonies in New England. You need to explain things, and link to other articles so that people can read more about the topic.
You also need to make sure that everything in the article is supported by citations to reliable sources so that readers to verify factual statements in your article. Every statement should be followed by a supporting citation; if a group of sentences are all supported by the same source, you can place a single reference after all of them, but you need to have at least one reference per paragraph, and you shouldn't have any statements after the final reference in a paragraph. If you need a refresher on how to add citations, please consult this training module.
Finally, you need to make sure that the sources you are using are reliable. Both FindAGrave and WikiTree are user-generated content - they aren't usable as sources for Wikipedia articles. The Medfield Patch article appears to be a transcription of something - maybe a marker or a headstone? It doesn't have enough context to work from. You need to find better sources. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:13, 3 May 2022 (UTC)