User talk:Jrichers/sandbox

Kristin Paullus - Peer Review

Great job on the article so far! The amount of work you've put into everything and the sources you have gathered are really good. Everything is structured and organized very well and you keep a neutral tone throughout the entire article. I noticed the original article for the Moscow State Jewish Theatre wasn't very detailed, so including the productions and notable actors was a great way to add more detail into what the company did. I especially love the addition to the "style and practices" section that you've put in to give a sense of how exactly the company performed.

My only suggestion would maybe add some more details on the "end" section and elaborate more on Solomon Mikhoels and his execution and why it was so important. Here's a link to an article I found about him and his life if you would like to take a look! http://www.yivoencyclopedia.org/article.aspx/Mikhoels_Solomon_Mikhailovich

Keep up the great work!

Brian Adkins - Peer Review

Firstly, I greatly appreciate that you open your article selection area with a link to the source page, and a list of sources that your team will be working from, and a gameplan. There is clear organization with the intent of your project and it helps with identifying the areas for editing, which helps in reviewing the content and changes.

The additions of ‘Notable artists’ and ‘Notable productions’ are great categories to add to this article. I would pose the question, “are these notable or exhaustive lists?” Your research may yield that they are, however with the shear number of missing connectors and links, it seems more along the exhaustive and comprehensive side; which may be perfectly fine.

The pictures are a great addition to the article and I find them to be helpful to the diversity of the page, and relevant to the article. (Also, does Solomon Mikhoels look like Danny Devito to anyone else?)

Overall, I genuinely like the flow of this article, the detail is astounding (great job!), and the only additional recommendation I might make is in the framework of the article (perhaps moving the pictures to align in the areas where the Notable sections are to capitalize on the free space to the right). This is, however, an aesthetic recommendation, and can be taken with a grain of salt. Cheers, Group 7! BMitchellAdkins (talk) 06:31, 16 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Christian Kelsey's Review

Great job choosing a fantastic article and identifying the gaps the article needs itself. Your additions with photography, credible secondary sources, and having an overall unbiased tone are noted! There were a few things I did notice that needs revision. Namely first, in Style and Practices, Granowsky is mentioned but little to no biography is given about him. Also there needs to be an source to back up the first sentence of that section. Overall I enjoyed your draft and I look forward to the final project! Great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cpkelsey (talk • contribs) 06:35, 16 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Christine's Peer Review

I was very very impressed with how you get the article factual and not at all biased, considering your background as a stage actor, I think It would have been easy to do so. I believe the article is very easy to read and well written. My only advice would be that I do not think that you need to repeat the exact same thing that is underneath the caption of the photo as the paragraph. Perhaps change the wording a bit so the reader feels like they are getting new information. User Cjacobites.

(John Richerson moved this peer review here to the sandbox talk page shortly after it was posted in the sandbox editing page on 2/19) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jrichers (talk • contribs) 03:45, 20 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]