User talk:Jgarc800/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

Week 2

A good job for this week. I think that your evaluation of the corporate farming page could have benefited from copying and pasting some clear examples about what you were talking about. It was too general to just say that "The article might seem to steer off topic at times, but it doesn't since the author talks about corporate farming in one way or another." I did not really understand what you meant by that. Your answers on the content gap were okay, but make sure to write more in future assignments. Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:24, 30 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Week 2 response

Thank you for the response, I will consider writing a little more in future assignments. @Alfgarciamora: Jgarc800 (talk) 15:09, 31 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Week 5

@Jgarc800: I think you need to do a lot more leg work on your research, Josh. Your second source looks sketchy. And your other two sources will provide some basic details, but you will probably go through them quite quickly. Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:44, 21 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

From what I can see, the article you choose contains a lot of information. In order to make a significant change you will have to do extensive research on this topic and go more in depth than is shown in the article. Although this article covers a wide variety of individual topics, it does not give equal consideration to each sub topic. For example, there is very little information on some of the battles considering Vendée military response. As for the changes that you have already made, I believe that you are on the right track. Pointing out the cause of specific effects helps the reader have a better understanding of what happened during this time. Continue your research and good luck!Csouc002 (talk) 03:16, 27 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

    @Csouc002:Thanks for the peer review. I will go and try to put more info on the battles that happened and try to address anything that I find that is not on the wiki page. Good luck with your project as well.

Week 8

You had the difficult task of adding to a page that already had substantial information, Jgarc800, but you were able to add at least some useful information to the page. Were you able to find stuff on the battles or other topics? Remember that you can add to pages that are relevant. Basically, anything that you think could be useful on other pages would be good. You do not have to focus just on the Vendee. Alfgarciamora (talk) 16:13, 20 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]