User talk:Jcyeung2/sandbox

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Review #1 Kmvogel2 (talk) 00:11, 2 November 2012 (UTC)Your article is looking really good! Here are a few things that you might want to add that should be simple. An image of the chemical in the Chem Box would make a good impression. If it's possible to find the reaction or any images of how Crufomate is formed, you could include that to expand your Wikipedia page as well! Your page is really well structured and has really good information in it that you hardly see in the most professional chemical wikipedia pages! Keep up the good work! Kmvogel2 (talk) 00:11, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Response #2

--Smkirk2 (talk) 14:25, 2 November 2012 (UTC)Your project is looking very good! I like the organization and the chembox is looking good as well. A few things that would be good to see is maybe a 3D or even just a structural model of your molecule so that people can see what kind of molecule you are talking about. Also if possible add a little more information about the molecule in your chembox to maximize your points in that area as well. Other than that I think that your project is looking great, good job![reply]

Response #3 gargas2 (talk) Overall the page looks really great. The sections are clearly labeled and the chem box has all the necessary components. The main thing I noticed about the page was the grammar. The first part of the article has three sentences all starting with "It is". Usually this wouldn't make much of a difference, but since it is the first part of the article I feel like it is important to draw in the reader with some sentence variation. At multiple parts throughout the article, there are some other minor grammatical errors. My second critique would be to try to upload a picture. I see you have one that you tried to upload, but it didn't show up on the page. You might want to read through the wiki instructions on how to add the picture properly so that it shows up. Really thorough job, though. I think it looks like an awesome article! Gargas2 (talk) 15:57, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]